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Another One of Mine

PostPosted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 5:19 am
by MonroeDoctrine
Ok Folks here goes nothing

To -------------------

'Twas like she pierced my chest with a huge blade;
the moment when the love begins to fade,
ails the soul with pangs ineffable; such
That the pain lingers----no matter how much
One attempts to run away from its grasp.

I burned in the immense hot flames that clasp
The tragic and fallen souls. However;
I found myself in the sky----The aether
was easily cut with my wings. The sky
Is now my abode. The Phoenix can’t die;

Only continue. I’m headed towards
The fixed stars-----in fact even more forward;
I’m headed to the Lord’s empyrean
Where love, beauty, truth and the soul are one;
She could have come along…now she’s alone.
MD

Re: Another One of Mine

PostPosted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 10:55 am
by Saturn
MonroeDoctrine wrote:I burned in the immense hot flames that clasp
The tragic and fallen souls. However;
I found myself in the sky----The aether
was easily cut with my wings. The sky
Is now my abode. The Phoenix can’t die;

Only continue.


Love this bit - nice one MD :D

Re: Another One of Mine

PostPosted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 9:49 pm
by AhDistinctly
Oh, my! What an ending! :shock:

MonroeDoctrine wrote:She could have come along…now she’s alone.

I LOVE the twist!

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 5:16 am
by dks
I like your absolutes, MD:

The Phoenix can’t die

and

I’m headed towards
The fixed stars-


They really add to the tone. :wink:

THanks

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 8:15 am
by MonroeDoctrine
I hope you folks would like it. Anyone that has written a poem knows they put themselves on the line when they share their posie.

Re: THanks

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 4:57 pm
by Saturn
MonroeDoctrine wrote:I hope you folks would like it. Anyone that has written a poem knows they put themselves on the line when they share their posie.


Indeed.

Thanks for being brave enough to share it with us.