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Rain Maker

PostPosted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 11:02 pm
by dks
And yet another metaphor from yours truly...

Rain Maker

My nimbus hollows are squeezed full,
Drizzle beads
Gather and pull more mounting air.

You are waiting alone there.
Moored to the mossy filigree,
That spreads over the dry lea.

I hold my breath, stubbornly.
You’re anticipating a gale.
I cannot keep this solvent mist
From its lag over your meadow,
Littered with parti-colored leaves.

Here it is again—
My squall at great velocity.
Endeavoring to soak the thirsty fields,
Your petals will render to clover honey.

Candied stems run muddy brown,
This pouring out will bear some hail,
And level a low rising sea.

PostPosted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 11:35 pm
by Saturn
As usual; exquisite: like supping on a brimming bowl of nectar.

Full of wonderful images Denise - I bow to the maestra :D

edit - that's the female forrm of maestro...

PostPosted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 4:40 am
by dks
Saturn wrote:As usual; exquisite: like supping on a brimming bowl of nectar.

Full of wonderful images Denise - I bow to the maestra :D

edit - that's the female forrm of maestro...


Maestra...oh, you are really being way too kind, Stephen...I've found myself bowing, too, when reading your verse...that Tantalus... :shock:

PostPosted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 10:56 am
by Saturn
dks wrote:
Saturn wrote:As usual; exquisite: like supping on a brimming bowl of nectar.

Full of wonderful images Denise - I bow to the maestra :D

edit - that's the female forrm of maestro...


Maestra...oh, you are really being way too kind, Stephen...I've found myself bowing, too, when reading your verse...that Tantalus... :shock:


Enough with that poem!! It really is nothing special I far prefer many other ones I've written. I do not rate it too highly at all.

PostPosted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 6:23 pm
by dks
Saturn wrote:Enough with that poem!! It really is nothing special I far prefer many other ones I've written. I do not rate it too highly at all.


But I do.

Nah. You know what? I shall never speak of it again.

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 10:06 pm
by Saturn
dks wrote:
Saturn wrote:Enough with that poem!! It really is nothing special I far prefer many other ones I've written. I do not rate it too highly at all.


But I do.

Nah. You know what? I shall never speak of it again.


Oh no.

Now I've made you angry :cry:

I'm very sorry Denise I'm just in awful mood at the minute - I shouldn't have taken that out on you.

I am really glad you like that poem, YOU are my critic and my readership rolled into one.

If I had an ounce of your talent and discernment I would deserve your admiration.

**hangs his head in shame**

Image

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 11:00 pm
by dks
:?

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 11:02 pm
by Saturn
:?:

Still angry :(

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 11:08 pm
by dks
Saturn wrote::?:

Still angry :(


Grrrrrr. I hate that hot in the cheeks feeling...I have explained myself--like a lady should...

...in your box.

PostPosted: Fri Oct 27, 2006 1:13 pm
by Richard
Oh not fucking Princess Prolific, again.
Look Ive got loads of work to do, will you stop posting and parading personal purple patches, Ive got to get off this machine.
What a vien you have reached, does searching for one tiny word ever keep you awake at night?


richard

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 6:26 am
by dks
Richard wrote:Oh not fucking Princess Prolific, again.
Look Ive got loads of work to do, will you stop posting and parading personal purple patches, Ive got to get off this machine.
What a vien you have reached, does searching for one tiny word ever keep you awake at night?


Ouch.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 6:53 pm
by AhDistinctly
dks wrote:
Richard wrote:Oh not fucking Princess Prolific, again.
Look Ive got loads of work to do, will you stop posting and parading personal purple patches, Ive got to get off this machine.
What a vien you have reached, does searching for one tiny word ever keep you awake at night?


Ouch.

I think Richard was complimenting you, Denise. At least, I read it that way.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 6:56 pm
by dks
Yes, I believe you are right, AD.

I'm the git who didn't pick that up... :oops: