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Inside

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 9:51 pm
by dks
Inside

She swims inside.
So much to do today; the scent of static cling sheets—
citrus melon—for a second,
Makes it go away.

She’ll get by.
With a kiss, a drink, a lie.
Lock the doors and flick the kitchen light.
Set the coffee maker to boil
In the middle of the night.
It drips into the white donut cream of day,
A glazed routine,
She has her mother’s hips, she sees
Them in the front mirrored panel of the Kenmore machine.
Tidy up the mud room and start the soup.

He’ll make it alright.
It’ll be ok.
One thought of dying a rapid fire death
Is not a reason to cry away
A shiny Sunday afternoon,
Besides, he’ll be home soon.

Tender breasts and printed curves
Shield the lucid beat of one small heart,
Murderously picked apart—
The swallows flitting by;
They fly so high, so appallingly high.

She will spread her skinned wings,
The barbs and down, like locked gaping jaws
Open wide.

It will be, at best,
A fleeting joy,
Save for him who simply smiles
And swims inside.

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 10:17 pm
by Saturn
As ever all I can do is this :shock: :shock: :shock:

PostPosted: Thu Oct 26, 2006 11:09 pm
by dks
You don't have to.

It's a chick poem anyway...

PostPosted: Fri Oct 27, 2006 2:33 am
by AhDistinctly
Oh, my. What to say?

:D and :cry: and :!: and :?:

Thanks for sharing another gem, Denise!

PostPosted: Fri Oct 27, 2006 2:38 am
by dks
AhDistinctly wrote:Oh, my. What to say?

:D and :cry: and :!: and :?:

Thanks for sharing another gem, Denise!


Well, thanks, AD. I can't tell how you feel about it, though...

PostPosted: Fri Oct 27, 2006 12:52 pm
by Richard
:roll:

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 6:04 am
by dks
Richard wrote:Gulp, oh, wow, I don't think I have ever read anything so intensely personally real. It has just stopped me dead in my tracks.
Denise, Denise ,,Denise.
Black Puss began milkpounding half way through Boulevard on the second reading. I trip up on 'Cooling units buzz...Above, is that you or me?

Richard


Thank you?

Richard, are you speaking of Boulevard? I worried it was a bit nebulous...but when I finished it--it was just...done.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 9:56 am
by Richard
:wink: :wink:

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 6:51 pm
by dks
Richard wrote:Denise, I was talking about Inside, the chicks poem.
In fact I'm sure I felt the rushing air of skinned wings, (some imagination eh) so immediate are the words.
In England 'Princess Prolific' is a term of affection :)
Richard


In America, prize idiot is a term for unwitting folks such as yours truly... :oops:

Thank you graciously for your kind critique, Richard...

Poetry is oxygen to me...someone told me over the weekend that it's simply a dead art. She almost guffawed when I looked surprised... :lol: :( :shock:

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 6:51 pm
by AhDistinctly
dks wrote:
AhDistinctly wrote:Oh, my. What to say?

:D and :cry: and :!: and :?:

Thanks for sharing another gem, Denise!


Well, thanks, AD. I can't tell how you feel about it, though...


You can't? I was expressing the emotions I experienced while reading your work. The :?: indicates it took me a couple tries to understand all of what you were conveying. I had to stop reading and instead SEE your images.

A delicate work of art, Denise!

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 6:54 pm
by dks
Thank you, AD... :oops:

You're too kind...I'm happy you like it. It's a small departure for me...

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 7:00 pm
by Kaki
You have quite a gift for imagery... Stunning... Yes, stunning is the word I want. Bravo. I can see that you would drown without poetry, so please keep swimming. You do so well.

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 7:02 pm
by dks
Kaki wrote:You have quite a gift for imagery... Stunning... Yes, stunning is the word I want. Bravo. I can see that you would drown without poetry, so please keep swimming. You do so well.


Kaki, what a poetic round of praise... :shock:

I falter and fall short with a flat thank you...

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 10:51 pm
by Saturn
As long as Denise lives and breathes poesy will never be dead...

;)

PostPosted: Mon Oct 30, 2006 11:49 pm
by edwardkeenaghan
Here,here :D :D :D :D

Denise is the Queen of hearts,truly :D