The Coach Drivers Neck

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The Coach Drivers Neck

Postby bulbus » Sun Jul 25, 2010 8:50 pm

The Coach Drivers Neck

Sore
vinegary
pock marked

bulging

spewing out of

a greasy burgundy blazer
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Re: The Coach Drivers Neck

Postby Saturn » Mon Jul 26, 2010 3:59 pm

Nice little vignette there bulbus, very succint.
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Re: The Coach Drivers Neck

Postby dks » Fri Aug 06, 2010 4:20 am

I like that! ...has a William Carlos Williams feel...
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Re: The Coach Drivers Neck

Postby gstormcrow » Fri Feb 04, 2011 10:16 pm

Imagery is the key element here. "Vinegary" - now that's genius! The highly descriptive terms used make me feel like I can actually see (& smell) the coach driver's neck.
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