Heliocentric

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Heliocentric

Postby Saturn » Sat Nov 27, 2010 7:13 pm

Heliocentric

Heliocentric, you
See the heavens
Spin; solely for you.
I abjure Copernicus,
In Ptolemy is truth:
The world is still
To me. Motion
Died when loss
Tore the stars
From the sky
And a meteor
Extinguished
Life and hope.

No system can
Replace the one
I've lived years
A most ardent
Disciple of. I
Stare, disbelief,
Desolation, I
Am a follower
Without a god,
A stray dog left
Unable to howl.

The universe
Unfurl, bring
Me back in time
Before implosion
Robbed my faith
In beginnings,
In the spark
We once felt.
______
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Re: Heliocentric

Postby BrokenLyre » Sun Nov 28, 2010 12:30 pm

I love the way you use scientific terms here Saturn. So intense and enjoyable for me. I especially like the way you state:

The world is still
To me. Motion
Died when loss
Tore the stars
From the sky
And a meteor
Extinguished
Life and hope

I can't help but think of Keats' comment that Newton destroyed the beauty of the rainbow. Thanks for the great read.
"Come... dry your eyes, for you are life, rarer than a quark and unpredictable beyond the dreams of Heisenberg; the clay in which the forces that shape all things leave their fingerprints most clearly. Dry your eyes... and let's go home."
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Re: Heliocentric

Postby Saturn » Sun Nov 28, 2010 12:33 pm

It was partly inspired by a programme about Copernicus' diagram of the Heliocentric universe. Thanks for the kind words Brokenlyre; much appreciated.
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Re: Heliocentric

Postby BrokenLyre » Sun Nov 28, 2010 12:37 pm

Thanks. I copied it to my file - with proper attribution (if you don't mind). I appreciate knowing the circumstances of composition as as well. So thanks for the quick response!
"Come... dry your eyes, for you are life, rarer than a quark and unpredictable beyond the dreams of Heisenberg; the clay in which the forces that shape all things leave their fingerprints most clearly. Dry your eyes... and let's go home."
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Re: Heliocentric

Postby Ennis » Mon Nov 29, 2010 4:32 pm

BrokenLyre wrote:I love the way you use scientific terms here Saturn. So intense and enjoyable for me. I especially like the way you state:

The world is still
To me. Motion
Died when loss
Tore the stars
From the sky
And a meteor
Extinguished
Life and hope

I can't help but think of Keats' comment that Newton destroyed the beauty of the rainbow. Thanks for the great read.


"Philosophy can clip an angel's wings,
Conquer all mysteries by rule and line,
Empty the haunted air, the gnomed mine,
Unweave a rainbow."
"But if you will fully love me, though there may be some fire, 'twill not be more than we can bear when moistened and bedewed with Pleasures." JK to FB 08.07.1819
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Re: Heliocentric

Postby marwood » Mon Dec 06, 2010 1:42 pm

lovely poem Saturn, I think it's quite moving, sadness running through it,
that's how it struck me.
Take care.
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