'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

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'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby ChildofWoz » Wed Jul 13, 2011 2:04 am

Gazing upon the painted luscious colours
Of a sweet smold'ring summer in full bloom,
Venus kisses each tender rosebud
Fallen to the rain, each petal bedewed
And reflecting heavily flower'd trees,
Their branches swollen with the ripe yield,
Years put into this sweet fruitful season.
The sun, his white hot rays bound to the earth,
Casts the temptress to temptation; she wades
Slowly into the cool charmed water.
The slow steady ebb and flow, the caress,
The sweet scent carried from afar, steals her
Breath and thoughts and everything about her.
Her skin shines with a fresh new glow and rain
Pours from the heavens, waking the fragrance
Of every wild flow'r in celebration
And soaks her hair, and delivers her soul,
And opens every flower to the sky
>And frees her to finally rest,
>Flowers pressed tight against her chest.
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby kylecarson » Thu Aug 18, 2011 7:29 pm

Anyone know where this poem is from? I want to know!
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby Saturn » Thu Aug 18, 2011 7:49 pm

I presume it was written by the poster.
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby ChildofWoz » Fri Aug 19, 2011 11:51 pm

Yes, as Saturn said, I wrote it.
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby Ennis » Tue Aug 23, 2011 6:11 pm

ChildofWoz wrote:Yes, as Saturn said, I wrote it.
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Yes, Childofwoz, as I believe I mentioned in a private message to you, it reminds me of early Keats.
Your poetry, to me, is remarkable. (and to risk giving away "secrets" between you and me: you've learned your Keats lessons well, keep reading his poems and letters, including more than his letters to Fanny Brawne [Have you read the "Chamber of Maiden Thought" and the "Vale of Soul-Making" letters, yet? -- as suggested? You get glimpses of a much-different Keats through the letters he writes to his male friends], and our much-loved and highly-respected forum members need to realize that this poet, this "ChildofWoz," is just a freshman in high school, but a very gifted freshman, to say the least!).
Well done on your poems, Childof Woz! How is that art-work based on Keats's poems coming along? I hope the suggestions I gave you were helpful.
Never forget how much I respect and love you. (I probably should have composed this as a private message, but sometimes the world [meaning our forum friends] needs to know some things about gifted, young posters who are interested in more than just homework help.).
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby ChildofWoz » Tue Aug 30, 2011 12:08 am

Ennis, thank you so much.
And, I agree that it helps people understand more if they get a bit of perspective on the person they are reading from.
I'm completely swamped with homework and things, but I will set aside time tonight and try to read them, or at least one of them.
The art is coming along; most of it is still in my head at the moment as I am taking on many projects at a time.

I could never forget that, Mrs. Norman--Ennis--hee hee.

Much love and thanks,
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby Raphael » Wed Jan 04, 2012 9:03 pm

Beautiful poem Child of Woz. You are talented. Do you mind me asking how old you are?
John....you did not live to see-
who we are because of what you left,
what it is we are in what we make of you.

Peter Sanson, 1995.
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby ChildofWoz » Fri Jan 13, 2012 2:12 am

Raphael wrote:Beautiful poem Child of Woz. You are talented. Do you mind me asking how old you are?


I don't mind at all. I'm fourteen years, although I'll be fifteen next month.
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby Raphael » Sat Jan 14, 2012 12:35 am

ChildofWoz wrote:
Raphael wrote:Beautiful poem Child of Woz. You are talented. Do you mind me asking how old you are?


I don't mind at all. I'm fourteen years, although I'll be fifteen next month.


That young and you can write poems like this?! I'd thought you might have been 18 and that would have been impressive enough! Do keep on with the poetry ChildofWoz- I think you could be a well known published poet one day. :D
I'm almost 3 times your age and cannot write poetry for toffee. :oops:
John....you did not live to see-
who we are because of what you left,
what it is we are in what we make of you.

Peter Sanson, 1995.
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby ChildofWoz » Sat Jan 14, 2012 1:32 am

Raphael wrote:
ChildofWoz wrote:
Raphael wrote:Beautiful poem Child of Woz. You are talented. Do you mind me asking how old you are?


I don't mind at all. I'm fourteen years, although I'll be fifteen next month.


That young and you can write poems like this?! I'd thought you might have been 18 and that would have been impressive enough! Do keep on with the poetry ChildofWoz- I think you could be a well known published poet one day. :D
I'm almost 3 times your age and cannot write poetry for toffee. :oops:


Oh, thank you, Raphael. You're too kind. I appreciate your feedback :mrgreen:
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Re: 'Gazing upon the painted luscious colours'

Postby Raphael » Mon Jan 16, 2012 11:59 pm

You are most welcome ChildofWoz- hope to see more of your poems!
John....you did not live to see-
who we are because of what you left,
what it is we are in what we make of you.

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