Lotus eater

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Lotus eater

Postby Saturn » Sat Sep 24, 2011 9:03 pm

Lotus eater
[for Mum]

Lost to the flower,
Stranded; inhaling
Reverie by mouth
You're a lotus eater,
Unconcious, and
Unbeknownest, all
Sails swift away:
Life, family, love
All forgotten, and
Blanked out clean.

A gossamer veil
Films your eyes
In forgetfulness.
Sleeping awake
You stare aghast
And reach for the
Words to fathom
Your own distress
And fail, in tears
To wrestle sense.
_________
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby marwood » Tue Sep 27, 2011 6:58 pm

Excellent work Saturn and extremely poignant.
Take care.
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby Saturn » Tue Sep 27, 2011 10:21 pm

Thanks once again for your too kind words marwood.
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby dks » Wed Oct 19, 2011 3:23 pm

I absolutely love this:

Sleeping awake
You stare aghast
And reach for the
Words to fathom
Your own distress
And fail, in tears
To wrestle sense.


"Wresting sense"? You got that out of your secret bag, Stephen. I am envious that your outpouring is a continuous wellspring. Sadly, mine is dust dry at the moment. I have a criminal sense of writer's block. I feel bad for even posting since I have been such a stranger. Hence the reason I have chosen to pick at the ice over here in this cozy corner of my beloved forum; hunkering down, whispering a few first, awkward words in a while in the cave haven of your poetry. Appropriate, I think.

Thanks for this, good man.
"I am certain of nothing but the holiness of the heart's affections and the Truth of Imagination."
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby Saturn » Wed Oct 19, 2011 9:17 pm

My writing is very rare and mostly maudlin and unhappy the last few years Denise, and in the case of this poem the subject matter is all too horrifyingly real and distressing I wish with all my heart I did not have to try and describe such things :(

Do not feel bad at your absence from the forum and not posting, although I really miss your wonderful input and observations I know what a busy and time-consuming life you must lead. All my best to you Edward and the kids, and I hope all is going shape shape with your happy family.

Take care my friend.
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby dks » Fri Oct 21, 2011 4:44 pm

We are all doing well...I have a poem at the minute distilling into ink...it will be forthcoming, as well as a long time coming. I don't think I have penned anything since last year about this time. Sometimes the door remains shut like that for some odd reason. But when it opens...it is unparalleled relief. I am always happy to be here...and equally such to read your work...
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby BrokenLyre » Sat Oct 29, 2011 1:56 am

Thanks for the fine read Saturn - you always amaze me with your work. And I am always so glad to hear from you dks. I, myself, and still trying to come out of a very terrible & troubling situation at work that has lasted over 11 months....arrgghhh...lost most of my friends at work...I know there's a poem in that mess somewhere...so I have not been around as much... but wonderful to read some posts again.
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby Saturn » Fri Nov 11, 2011 10:22 pm

If nothing else positive comes from a great pain, let a poem in spring bud from the thorny stem...
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby titian dj » Tue Nov 22, 2011 1:38 pm

Hello, Saturn

I was drawn to the title of the poem and when I read [for mum] I wondered
what was to follow. I wasn't disappointed. Your poem is sensitive and full of
rich imagery clearly demonstrating your humanity.

I was sharply remimded of a poem I wrote, a few years ago, about the
passing of my mother "Don't Forget the Flowers" and the emotions were stirred
once again (in an accepting sort of way)

Anyway you have an excellent title and a beautiful poem.

Best

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Re: Lotus eater

Postby Saturn » Tue Nov 22, 2011 4:18 pm

Thanks titian, you are very kind.
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Re: Lotus eater

Postby Raphael » Wed Jan 04, 2012 8:59 pm

Poignant poem Saturn- thanks for sharing it.
John....you did not live to see-
who we are because of what you left,
what it is we are in what we make of you.

Peter Sanson, 1995.
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