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Capricorn

Postby ChildofWoz » Fri Mar 02, 2012 9:07 pm

Thy skin, so soft as clouded sky in day,
Pillowed upon the celestial form,
Its swell and fall perpetual and gray.
Roaming, the twilight storms on ocean shores
Cast their divine shadows upon my soul
And lighting into the depths of my heart.
Purple stained mouth, though it doth console,
Destroys me when thy poison tongue doth dart
To say the thing, the dreadful thing that tears
My world and desecrates my very will,
Say you, I am as vibrant as the air,
And vanish to the bright daylight. Yet still,
I give thee my heart, forever to keep,
In thy world of stars, forever to sleep.
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Re: Capricorn

Postby Raphael » Wed Mar 07, 2012 1:40 am

Superb imagery and content ChildofWoz- loved "purple stained mouth"..very good poem indeed.
John....you did not live to see-
who we are because of what you left,
what it is we are in what we make of you.

Peter Sanson, 1995.
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Re: Capricorn

Postby ChildofWoz » Wed Mar 07, 2012 3:41 am

Raphael wrote:Superb imagery and content ChildofWoz- loved "purple stained mouth"..very good poem indeed.


Thank you, Raphael. As always, I take your compliments to heart. As my English I Honours class progresses, we're getting more and more into poetry, and this was a Shakespearean Sonnet assignment. It was quite a difficult endeavor to decide upon a topic! :mrgreen:
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Re: Capricorn

Postby Raphael » Wed Mar 07, 2012 10:53 pm

You are still at high school and write sonnets- brilliant! Must be a top school as well cos my high school never asked us to write any poems at all.
John....you did not live to see-
who we are because of what you left,
what it is we are in what we make of you.

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Re: Capricorn

Postby BrokenLyre » Thu Mar 08, 2012 8:10 am

I love the Keats references - very beautiful and clever. "The world of stars" is lovely to think about and say. My favorite phrase. Thanks!
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Re: Capricorn

Postby ChildofWoz » Thu Mar 08, 2012 7:31 pm

BrokenLyre wrote:I love the Keats references - very beautiful and clever. "The world of stars" is lovely to think about and say. My favorite phrase. Thanks!


Thank you very much! I was hoping that my English teacher would get the reference, but sadly she did not.
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