Broken embraces

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Broken embraces

Postby Saturn » Mon Mar 10, 2014 9:43 pm

Broken embraces

Are we stuck with
These stolen and
Broken embraces
And winter morns
Full of the regrets
Of drunken fools?

Aren't transitions
Supposed to fade
To nothingness?
We coil and we
Uncouple again,
And we separate.

Magnetism isn't
A surefire thing.
Pulling apart to
Collide once more
Is harder than to
Break to pieces.
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Re: Broken embraces

Postby BrokenLyre » Sat Mar 29, 2014 5:59 am

Wow - what a different piece this is - so true Saturn - at least in some experiences of mine. Love your two questions and the insight at the end. Amazes me how you pack so much into so few words. I love the balance of "Broken embraces" to "Break to pieces" at the end. Nicely done.
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Re: Broken embraces

Postby Saturn » Sun Mar 30, 2014 11:07 pm

Thanks a lot Broken Lyre, you're too kind.

I think it's similar to the few poems I've written in the last year or two.

Economy is the ideal, it has taken years to learn how to be more economical, be more precise with words; all the very greatest poets pack more precision and meaning into short phrases or small, compact verses.
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Re: Broken embraces

Postby marwood » Sun May 11, 2014 4:47 pm

Good work Saturn. Lovely to read your poetry.
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Re: Broken embraces

Postby Saturn » Sun May 11, 2014 5:25 pm

Thanks as always marwood.
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