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Broken embraces

PostPosted: Mon Mar 10, 2014 9:43 pm
by Saturn
Broken embraces

Are we stuck with
These stolen and
Broken embraces
And winter morns
Full of the regrets
Of drunken fools?

Aren't transitions
Supposed to fade
To nothingness?
We coil and we
Uncouple again,
And we separate.

Magnetism isn't
A surefire thing.
Pulling apart to
Collide once more
Is harder than to
Break to pieces.
_____

Re: Broken embraces

PostPosted: Sat Mar 29, 2014 5:59 am
by BrokenLyre
Wow - what a different piece this is - so true Saturn - at least in some experiences of mine. Love your two questions and the insight at the end. Amazes me how you pack so much into so few words. I love the balance of "Broken embraces" to "Break to pieces" at the end. Nicely done.

Re: Broken embraces

PostPosted: Sun Mar 30, 2014 11:07 pm
by Saturn
Thanks a lot Broken Lyre, you're too kind.

I think it's similar to the few poems I've written in the last year or two.

Economy is the ideal, it has taken years to learn how to be more economical, be more precise with words; all the very greatest poets pack more precision and meaning into short phrases or small, compact verses.

Re: Broken embraces

PostPosted: Sun May 11, 2014 4:47 pm
by marwood
Good work Saturn. Lovely to read your poetry.
Take care.

Re: Broken embraces

PostPosted: Sun May 11, 2014 5:25 pm
by Saturn
Thanks as always marwood.