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Night or day?

PostPosted: Tue Jun 30, 2015 9:06 am
by Saturn
Night or day

In my stumbledrunkeness, sodden,
Swollen loneness; ambling ahead
A relic in the distance swayed.
A man out of time asked the time.
His accent old, rural, fossil voiced.
Pipe-lipped he sucked, blew out words
With the polite reserve of ages past
"Night or day?" said he. I struggled
To grasp meaning with both ears.
Apology rendered, again he said
"Night or day?" "I have no idea"
I told him, half in joking, but
Half in despair, not knowing
If the glass was empty or full.
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Re: Night or day?

PostPosted: Fri Aug 28, 2015 2:38 pm
by marwood
I like this Saturn. Love the phrase 'fossil voiced'
Hope all is well with you.
Take care.

Re: Night or day?

PostPosted: Fri Aug 28, 2015 4:05 pm
by Cybele
I second Marwood's remarks!
So many good poems have a lot of meaning and substance between the words, and this is one of those poems.

Re: Night or day?

PostPosted: Mon Aug 31, 2015 8:13 pm
by Saturn
Thanks guys!

Re: Night or day?

PostPosted: Tue Sep 01, 2015 4:55 am
by BrokenLyre
I enjoyed this Saturn - a really nice, creative poem from your hand. Your images are wonderful.