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Untittled

PostPosted: Tue Nov 28, 2006 8:39 pm
by Brave Archer
I was upset when I began this and a little afraid-- I almost lost a family member. People tell you they'll always be there but most of the time they won't be. I'm the type of person who you never let's anyone know when something is wrong. I can't tell my mother because she'll worry too much and as for everyone else my problems are not there problem. Just how I feel, but anywhoo.


My heart was crying out
Looking for you to be there
But, of course, you were not!

Illness plagued, creeping up slowly
There I was left alone
Not feeling lost, even worse, feeling lonely.

Took the words you spoke
'I love you, Trey' to heart.
But, still I sate alone in the dark.

Not her fault I wa let down,
It's my fault I look'd for her
Beliving if needed she'd be around.



I won't put the rest.

PostPosted: Tue Nov 28, 2006 9:01 pm
by Kaki
There's more? Come on then, I've written a thirty page poem before (I did not post it nor am I going to) so it can't be length preventing the ending. Besides it is hard to fully understand heart-felt poetry without the ending, the ending is so important. For example without the ending to "When I have fears" (let's say after "unreflecting love;") the poem just doesn't have the same meaning. So if you're gonna post it then POST it don't leave us hanging, swingn' off the edge of the cliff isn't much fun when you're acrophobic.