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Life in the deep ocean.

PostPosted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 11:33 pm
by Saturn
Life in the deep ocean.

Skirting along the bottom,
Blinded, and cold, I slither:
Finned and scaled I glide
Looking for prey: I starve.

Cannot reach the surface,
Cannot feel any warmth
Rippling along my back:
Light flickers too far above.

Out of sight and sound
I meander for days below.
Eyes darkened, heart cold,
I suffer the bends for you.

PostPosted: Mon Mar 26, 2007 5:04 pm
by dks
I love this in particular:

Skirting along the bottom,
Blinded, and cold, I slither:
Finned and scaled I glide
Looking for prey: I starve.


...and this:

Eyes darkened, heart cold,
I suffer the bends for you.


It's almost reminiscent of Coleridge...a bit fantasmic and yet powerful in theme.

Another great one...I also like how it packs an emotional punch with its brevity...sometimes the shortest poems are the most stirring.

PostPosted: Mon Mar 26, 2007 9:34 pm
by Saturn
:oops:

Another one thrown off in five minutes but people seem to like it.

:lol: