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Dedication, To the Poets

PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 7:57 pm
by AsphodelElysium
I wrote this a couple of years ago after I took a particularly wonderful poetry writing class. I recently pulled it out for a workshop and thought I would share it here. Hope it isn't too awful. :oops:

Dedication, To the Poets


The reflections that can be found
on your glistening skins
are souls composed from
sparkling sunshine melodies
that dance over thunderstorm chords.
Your pretty pain is our ugly joy.
Drowning in mortal excesses,
revived in exultant wishes,
your eyes can see the wind
and your hands are older
for the knowledge they possess
of men’s bodies and women’s hearts,
of honeyed pens and mellifluous paper.
Birthed in Byzantine gold,
snuffed out candles at 25,
you still make us believe
that the Second Coming has come and gone,
Heaven is a car wreck away,
a glass of wine can last forever,
and despite gas ovens, foggy poison,
falling bridges, shotguns, and bad reviews,
our spirits are still wet-winged nightingales
that are innocent of swan songs.

PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 10:14 pm
by Saturn
Really nice... "glistening skins" - I like that.

PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 10:21 pm
by AsphodelElysium
Thanks! :D

PostPosted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 2:38 am
by dks
I like the modernity in your lyric verse, AD...that is not easy to pull off well--and you do it easily...I particularly like this:


Your pretty pain is our ugly joy.
Drowning in mortal excesses,
revived in exultant wishes,
your eyes can see the wind
and your hands are older
for the knowledge they possess
of men’s bodies and women’s hearts,
of honeyed pens and mellifluous paper.

PostPosted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 6:12 pm
by AsphodelElysium
dks wrote:I like the modernity in your lyric verse


Thank you! It is interesting that you brought that up. It was also brought up in the aforementioned workshop, though the language, according to my professor, was more "Romantic" than "Modern." I don't know if he meant that to be a compliment or not, my guess is not, but I was flattered anyway. I think of my writing as more Modern (all things considered) but that's me. Maybe it is some sort of weird hybrid. But I think I can live with that too. :)

PostPosted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 10:23 pm
by Saturn
I like to think of my poems as moderno-romantic hybrids so you are in good company here :wink:

PostPosted: Wed Apr 25, 2007 12:41 am
by dks
AsphodelElysium wrote:Thank you! It is interesting that you brought that up. It was also brought up in the aforementioned workshop, though the language, according to my professor, was more "Romantic" than "Modern." I don't know if he meant that to be a compliment or not, my guess is not, but I was flattered anyway.


Indeed, that was a compliment!! As it should have been...a nice, marbled hybrid--yes, I see that.

PostPosted: Wed Apr 25, 2007 6:34 pm
by AsphodelElysium
Saturn wrote:I like to think of my poems as moderno-romantic hybrids so you are in good company here :wink:


I'm glad to hear it. :D

PostPosted: Wed Apr 25, 2007 6:39 pm
by AsphodelElysium
Indeed, that was a compliment!! As it should have been...a nice, marbled hybrid--yes, I see that.


Coming from that particular prof., it probably wasn't, lol. I think he confuses Romanticism with sentimentality, and therefore makes it a dirty word by association. In any case, I'm glad you all like the poem. :D