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Assassin

PostPosted: Fri May 11, 2007 2:49 pm
by Saturn
Another off-the-cuff-tossed-off-in-five-minutes job...

Inspiration, not perspiration is my lazy-assed motto :lol:

Assassin

You stalk me like an assassin,
Deadly, always hitting the mark.
You gun me down with a look;
A sniper with deep blue eyes.

You kill me with a smile,
Cut me to fragments
With a turn of the head
And a toss of your hair.

Your voice slays me
Like a piercing blast
Of hot searing lead
Poured in my ears:
A wonderful death.

I'm always in the sights,
A willing stationary target.
I love that killer blow
That strikes me down.
________

PostPosted: Fri May 11, 2007 6:22 pm
by dks
Yikes almighty. :shock: Now that is Plath-esque! I f**ckin' love it!

I can identify with that rawness of feeling associated with fear of hurt...oh--the Keatsian "sweetness of pain" :!:

This is fan-f**ckin'-tastic:

Your voice slays me
Like a piercing blast
Of hot searing lead
Poured in my ears:
A wonderful death.

I'm always in the sights,
A willing stationary target.
I love that killer blow
That strikes me down.

PostPosted: Fri May 11, 2007 9:51 pm
by Saturn
Can I tell you a little secret - the real inspiration for the assassin - the Geena Davis/Samuel L. Jackson movie The Long Kiss Goodnight :lol:
:wink:

I'm a bit obsessed with Geena Davis at the moment hmmm

Re: Assassin

PostPosted: Sun May 13, 2007 5:42 am
by AsphodelElysium
Saturn wrote:Inspiration, not perspiration is my lazy-assed motto :lol:


This is potentially the funniest motto I've ever read. Please tell me I can quote you? :D

As for the poem, I find the contrast between the violence and the unexpected reaction very workable. In fact, its a bit masochistic, but in love, the object of desire often causes a good deal of welcomed pain, so the contrast really works out to a comparison. In any case, very well done, again. :wink:

PostPosted: Sun May 13, 2007 9:47 am
by Saturn
Well that always say sex and death are closely linked...


You can have that motto but I didn't coin it.

I'm sure I got it from somewhere else :lol:

PostPosted: Sun May 13, 2007 11:12 am
by AsphodelElysium
Thank you very much! I'm going to find a way to employ it in my everyday dialogue. :D