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Relevance

PostPosted: Wed Jun 20, 2007 9:29 pm
by dks
I normally don't use profanity in my poetry (if that is what you'd deem it), but this is just how I really feel at the moment...

Relevance

Strange how the shock and sense
Of a dream is certain
below the skin of a real day.

I know all about the right way
And what not to say.

Who will employ my retiring soul?
Subsidize my contracted spirit,
Laud my efforts to promote myself
Out of a particular black hole?

‘Invest your money.’
‘Go to that church.’
‘Don’t wear red to an interview.’
‘Be nice.’

It’s all about as relevant
As a goddamn bowl of mice.

PostPosted: Wed Jun 20, 2007 10:06 pm
by Saturn
Oh dear Denise is in a bad mood :(

Don't give up hope I'm sure someone of your prodigious talents will find something that uses them to the best of your ability.

PostPosted: Wed Jun 20, 2007 11:04 pm
by AsphodelElysium
Bad mood or no, you still got an excellent poem out of it. I particularly like:

Strange how the shock and sense
Of a dream is certain
below the skin of a real day.


The "s" alliteration is really good here too. In any case, you've turned your mood into a positive with the poem, I believe everything else will follow suit. It'll be okay and we're always here if you need to talk. :D Take care and good luck!