The incident of Keats and the crown

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The incident of Keats and the crown

Postby Matt » Wed Jun 16, 2004 5:01 pm

Forgive me for inflicting these awkward clumsy verses on you. I blame my lack of experience. You can blame who or what you like. Please I would appreciate comments. I try not to be to archaic in my poetry. I try to modernise whilst still retaining an element of whats passed. As i have just said, please let me know your responses. Here goes....

'On learning of the incident where Keats wore a crown'

I see you now with that crown upon your head,
Rightly so-yet two young girls so filled you with dread
That it crossed you mind to dicscared that Ivry Wreath
Unto the hedge.
But you didn't.
In foolish chivalry, you kept it on,
For you are wild and free and you do what you do.

Yes the muffled laughs were directed at you
And your self-inflicted halo,
And for once wine will not ease the weight
on your mind,
Yet the Ivy is like lead and all eyes are upon it,
Embarassed and wondering...

Giggles escort the young girls home
And you sit there staring into the flames,
The wreath now crushed
In your fist.
You will throw it into the fire,
With humiliated frown
But please know this one thing:
You deserved that crown.
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A good effort

Postby Saturn » Wed Jun 16, 2004 10:54 pm

I understand the poem on the incident of the crowning.

It's written the way I wrote poetry years ago. I fell into the same trap myself - trying to imitate a favourite author. This is a common occurence, and nothing to be ashamed of. However in merely trying to be ventriloquists we drown out our own voices, i.e. by slavishly copying what the great writers have written, we deny ourselves the chance to use our own individual voice.

I speak with years of experience in struggling to find my own voice in my poetry. It is a long agonising process, and one which takes great self-awareness, and the ability to criticise oneself mercilessly.

If you are serious about developing your work I think you should try to write about things that really matter to you, your thoughts, feelings etc and try not to engage with the past too much.
I have long abandoned any attempts to write in a bogus nineteenth-century style of verse - it is just too insincere to write in such a style today.

That is not to say that you shouldn't try to praise the calssics and their authors, but that in doing so we should try and forge a new poetry for today's world.

But hey, what do I know?
I'm just an amatuer whose own work is laughably concerned with classical mythology, the arts, and my own thoughts and feelings, but the advice I give is for me an ideal goal that I aspire to.
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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