Ode to a Snowflake

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Ode to a Snowflake

Postby SidewalkProphet » Mon Feb 02, 2009 4:32 pm

Oh little flake of purest white
How soft you glide from heavens height
To rest upon the frosty land
And touch the world with icy hands

Oh with your brethren cold and crisp
The barest sight, the slightest wisp
Cascading through the wintry sky
‘Til at my feet you gently lie

Oh tiny snowflake, natures lace
How soft you fall upon my face
Leave diamond traces on my skin
Before you vanish with your kin.
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Re: Brilliant!

Postby zebluepenguin » Fri Mar 13, 2009 4:17 am

Brilliant! It gives the snowflake an image of being small and tiny--and soft. And it really rhymes! I LOVE it! :D :
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Re: Ode to a Snowflake

Postby Rich Roach » Mon Mar 16, 2009 1:52 am

I love those "diamond traces." Your ear and eye have worked together well here.

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Re: Ode to a Snowflake

Postby titian dj » Mon Mar 16, 2009 3:27 pm

Very nice. A thoroughly enjoyable read, with a layer or two methinks?

I detect wistful overtones, a hint of sadness, maybe a quiet reflection.

I think I'd drop 'Ode' from the title. Just thinkin'.

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Re: Ode to a Snowflake

Postby jak3 » Fri Jun 26, 2009 2:37 am

l like it, i really do
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Re: Ode to a Snowflake

Postby Wynn » Fri Jun 26, 2009 6:57 pm

titian dj wrote:I think I'd drop 'Ode' from the title. Just thinkin'.


'Ode' is appropriate because she is addressing the snowflake directly, and that's what an ode is.
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Re: Ode to a Snowflake

Postby steffen » Sun Mar 21, 2010 11:00 am

This is POETRY at its finest: faultless, effortless, captivating, pure truth delightfully understated straight from the great mind and heart of an authentic poet.
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Re: Ode to a Snowflake

Postby SidewalkProphet » Sun Mar 21, 2010 9:02 pm

Wow thanks everyone *blushes* :)

SP.

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