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Ode to a Snowflake

PostPosted: Mon Feb 02, 2009 4:32 pm
by SidewalkProphet
Oh little flake of purest white
How soft you glide from heavens height
To rest upon the frosty land
And touch the world with icy hands

Oh with your brethren cold and crisp
The barest sight, the slightest wisp
Cascading through the wintry sky
‘Til at my feet you gently lie

Oh tiny snowflake, natures lace
How soft you fall upon my face
Leave diamond traces on my skin
Before you vanish with your kin.

Re: Brilliant!

PostPosted: Fri Mar 13, 2009 4:17 am
by zebluepenguin
Brilliant! It gives the snowflake an image of being small and tiny--and soft. And it really rhymes! I LOVE it! :D :

Re: Ode to a Snowflake

PostPosted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 1:52 am
by Rich Roach
I love those "diamond traces." Your ear and eye have worked together well here.

Rich

Re: Ode to a Snowflake

PostPosted: Mon Mar 16, 2009 3:27 pm
by titian dj
Very nice. A thoroughly enjoyable read, with a layer or two methinks?

I detect wistful overtones, a hint of sadness, maybe a quiet reflection.

I think I'd drop 'Ode' from the title. Just thinkin'.

Best,

Bri

Re: Ode to a Snowflake

PostPosted: Fri Jun 26, 2009 2:37 am
by jak3
l like it, i really do

Re: Ode to a Snowflake

PostPosted: Fri Jun 26, 2009 6:57 pm
by Wynn
titian dj wrote:I think I'd drop 'Ode' from the title. Just thinkin'.


'Ode' is appropriate because she is addressing the snowflake directly, and that's what an ode is.

Re: Ode to a Snowflake

PostPosted: Sun Mar 21, 2010 11:00 am
by steffen
This is POETRY at its finest: faultless, effortless, captivating, pure truth delightfully understated straight from the great mind and heart of an authentic poet.

Re: Ode to a Snowflake

PostPosted: Sun Mar 21, 2010 9:02 pm
by SidewalkProphet
Wow thanks everyone *blushes* :)

SP.

xx