Aftershave

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Aftershave

Postby marwood » Sun Apr 12, 2009 9:55 am

Afew years ago, a friend of mine thought his wife was having an affair,he was riddled with suspicion and jealousy,
It ate away at him,and almost destroyed him.


"I love you"

Rolled
Too readily off your
Tongue,
As though you had said it
A thousand times before,
A reflex.

"Sorry"

I didn't call,
Battery on my phone was
Dead,
Friend said I could
Crash
There the night,
Liar.

Like a Forensic Scientist,
I examined your
Clothes,
Seaching for
Evidence.

A Bloodhound
Sniffing
For clues.

I could smell his
Aftershave
On your
Pillow.
Last edited by marwood on Fri Mar 25, 2011 11:49 am, edited 1 time in total.
That I might drink, and leave the world unseen.
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Re: Aftershave

Postby Saturn » Sun Apr 12, 2009 4:48 pm

I really like this, you can almost feel the creeping suspicion, the seething, the jealousy boiling up.
Every warm-blooded man's been there, and known what it is when a doubt can linger and fester in the mind.

Thanks for sharing marwood.
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Re: Aftershave

Postby marwood » Mon Apr 13, 2009 10:08 am

Thank you for your kind words Saturn,they were most welcome to a novice in prose.
Keep up the good work for this site,and your poetry.
Best wishes, Marwood,
That I might drink, and leave the world unseen.
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