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Sonnet

Postby Wynn » Tue Jun 16, 2009 12:07 am

Laud Sonnet

Blooming girl, you are the jester’s bells,
The merriest of all the things that ring,
Painless, light, and easy my heart swells
As when I hear the warbling birds in Spring,
Or when the sun-warmed wind on morning climbs,
Endears the flow’ring hillsides steeped in dew,
With unheard ditties sweeter than heard chimes:
So when she sees you, Mother Earth breathes new.
Even as the mellow sky in rosy-hue
Lulls the fields and drinks the sun’s last rays,
A sparrow sings it’s final song for you,
An ode to your blown hair and lantern face.
And as the orange moon ascends with careful sorrow,
Nature ponders how to greet you on the morrow.
"Never trust a poet who can't construct a stanza."
— Clive James
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Re: Sonnet

Postby AsphodelElysium » Tue Jun 23, 2009 8:14 pm

Lovely :).
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But, when I am consumed in the fire,
Give me new Phoenix wings to fly at my desire."
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Re: Sonnet

Postby steffen » Wed May 26, 2010 9:30 pm

Wynn, I had your SONNET for dessert tonight. Thank you for this exquisite, sensitive piece of work, so technically well done, so gentle and deeply felt, and yet detached. The rhyming is subtle, and unlike so many other attempts, is not forced, nor does it distort, but rather forms part and parcel of the whole. It's a poem marked by ^high seriousness´. You take us through a spring day painted in water-colors set to the music of chiming bells and bird song. I love your happy blooming girl. I would find it difficult to imagine a finer ending:

"And as the moon ascends with careful sorrow,
Nature ponders how to greet you on the morrow"

^careful sorrow" ---- how wonderfully said, truly marvelous!
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Re: Sonnet

Postby Raphael » Wed May 26, 2010 11:19 pm

I really like it Wynn! It has a c. 19th feel to it. I hope you post some more.It's very good.
John....you did not live to see-
who we are because of what you left,
what it is we are in what we make of you.

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Re: Sonnet

Postby gstormcrow » Fri Feb 04, 2011 7:46 pm

Wow!!! The poetic imagery in your "Sonnet" is nothing less than perfect as its rhythm spirits the verses along romantically. A true gem! I want some more of that stuff your cooking, too.
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