Loss adjustment

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Loss adjustment

Postby marwood » Mon Jun 22, 2009 8:05 pm

Still you come to me in dreams,
Harder now
To recall the sound of your voice.
As though trying hard to hold on to smoke,
The memory of the man
Who would arise early to light the fires,
Sits with tea and toast, in the flickering,
Sibling warmth.

We never suspected for one sad
Moment
The gathering swarm,
That would one future day leave you
A spectral shadow, too frail
To again see the stars.
Time may become transient,
But does not heal,
You learn to adjust the level of loss.
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Re: Loss adjustment

Postby dks » Tue Jun 23, 2009 3:09 am

I really really like the lilt and flow of your words, Marwood...this is quite nice:

Still, you come to me in dreams,
Harder now,
To recall the sound of your voice;
As though, trying hard to hold on to smoke,
The memory, of the man,
Who would arise early, to light the fires,
Sits with tea and toast, in the flickering,
Sibling warmth...


Thanks so much for sharing this!!
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Re: Loss adjustment

Postby Saturn » Tue Jun 23, 2009 5:24 pm

Two words...spectral and haunting.

Fine work marwood.
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Re: Loss adjustment

Postby AsphodelElysium » Tue Jun 23, 2009 8:12 pm

I really enjoyed this, thank you for sharing.
"Let me not wander in a barren dream,
But, when I am consumed in the fire,
Give me new Phoenix wings to fly at my desire."
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