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in miserable honor (of those secret crushes)

PostPosted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 11:24 pm
by dks
Here is something a wrote yesterday--to help explain how I feel.


An Artifice

How do I turn you into mine?
That is,
My own phantasm and creation,
So sinewy and fine spun
That you gallop right out
Of my humming imagination.

I’ll wager
That you’d rush back
Inside my head,
Unnerved,
That you might entreat
Your own
idea or two—

Which could quite
Temper
The way I imagine
You.

PostPosted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 11:41 pm
by Saturn
Excellent - that describes the feeling perfectly.

Very eloquent and moving.

You are ridiculously talented Denise :shock:

'humming imagination' - wonderful turn of phrase there.


*blushes in inadequacy* :oops:

PostPosted: Thu Apr 13, 2006 12:04 am
by dks
:oops: :oops:

Stop! Please. Don't--please, don't stop... :P

Seriously, I'm flattered you'd even think my work was worth a skim.
I'm more than sure I'll litter up this forum with more of my verse as time goes by...

:)

PostPosted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 9:38 pm
by edwardkeenaghan
How do I turn you into mine?
That is,
My own phantasm and creation,
So sinewy and fine spun
That you gallop right out
Of my humming imagination.


Again its a treat to read all these poems i missed of yours,its a bit all to interesting and revealing.you write like a mason to stone,trying to keep shaping and changing for your fit.

:)

PostPosted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 9:40 pm
by edwardkeenaghan
Every single one of your poems is more than meets the eye,and i love that and "I" digesting these lines like food. :)