I Smiled

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I Smiled

Postby dks » Fri Mar 02, 2007 5:45 pm

Finished this one today...

I Smiled

I smiled when
I saw you wave at me
From behind the peachleaf willow,
Where a butterfly weed
Was convoyed by an inspired bee.

While you waved, I walked
Across the patterned prairie,
Ruby dabbed with pear buds—
Needles like antennae,
Piercing the breeze.

Still you waved on,
Blonde sun smothering
Your coal black hair—
Effusing henna rust.
Then I fell to my knees.

You stopped waving.
The catkins and blooms moldered to dust,
While catch ropes dangled
From manifold, verdant Dule trees.
"I am certain of nothing but the holiness of the heart's affections and the Truth of Imagination."
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Postby Saturn » Fri Mar 02, 2007 10:58 pm

Now I have to praise your immediacy fora change Denise.

You make the everyday poetic, the trivial beautiful.

Your descriptions are always so vivid I can really picture them so clearly :D

I don't even know what Dule trees are but you make them sound wonderful.
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Postby Saturn » Sat Mar 03, 2007 12:22 am

So many good lines

I love this in particular:
Where a butterfly weed
Was convoyed by an inspired bee.

that's delightful.

I've read this about five times now and keep seeing new things :shock:
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Postby dks » Sat Mar 03, 2007 4:27 am

:oops: Thanks, Stephen. As always, you are too kind.

A Dule tree is a very hard timbered tree where people were hung from...executed with a noose...it's a disturbing image, I know--but it's a metaphor--for a petrified fear of impending heartbreak.

This one came out rather quickly...some of the images almost caught me by surprise.
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Postby Saturn » Sat Mar 03, 2007 11:30 am

dks wrote:
This one came out rather quickly...some of the images almost caught me by surprise.


That's how it is for me sometimes, images can just pour over you and you have to cup your hands to catch them before they wash away through your fingers.

EDIT - that sounds pretentious, but you know what I mean :oops:
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