Dedication, To the Poets

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Dedication, To the Poets

Postby AsphodelElysium » Mon Apr 23, 2007 7:57 pm

I wrote this a couple of years ago after I took a particularly wonderful poetry writing class. I recently pulled it out for a workshop and thought I would share it here. Hope it isn't too awful. :oops:

Dedication, To the Poets


The reflections that can be found
on your glistening skins
are souls composed from
sparkling sunshine melodies
that dance over thunderstorm chords.
Your pretty pain is our ugly joy.
Drowning in mortal excesses,
revived in exultant wishes,
your eyes can see the wind
and your hands are older
for the knowledge they possess
of men’s bodies and women’s hearts,
of honeyed pens and mellifluous paper.
Birthed in Byzantine gold,
snuffed out candles at 25,
you still make us believe
that the Second Coming has come and gone,
Heaven is a car wreck away,
a glass of wine can last forever,
and despite gas ovens, foggy poison,
falling bridges, shotguns, and bad reviews,
our spirits are still wet-winged nightingales
that are innocent of swan songs.
"Let me not wander in a barren dream,
But, when I am consumed in the fire,
Give me new Phoenix wings to fly at my desire."
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Postby Saturn » Mon Apr 23, 2007 10:14 pm

Really nice... "glistening skins" - I like that.
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Mon Apr 23, 2007 10:21 pm

Thanks! :D
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But, when I am consumed in the fire,
Give me new Phoenix wings to fly at my desire."
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Postby dks » Tue Apr 24, 2007 2:38 am

I like the modernity in your lyric verse, AD...that is not easy to pull off well--and you do it easily...I particularly like this:


Your pretty pain is our ugly joy.
Drowning in mortal excesses,
revived in exultant wishes,
your eyes can see the wind
and your hands are older
for the knowledge they possess
of men’s bodies and women’s hearts,
of honeyed pens and mellifluous paper.
"I am certain of nothing but the holiness of the heart's affections and the Truth of Imagination."
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Tue Apr 24, 2007 6:12 pm

dks wrote:I like the modernity in your lyric verse


Thank you! It is interesting that you brought that up. It was also brought up in the aforementioned workshop, though the language, according to my professor, was more "Romantic" than "Modern." I don't know if he meant that to be a compliment or not, my guess is not, but I was flattered anyway. I think of my writing as more Modern (all things considered) but that's me. Maybe it is some sort of weird hybrid. But I think I can live with that too. :)
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But, when I am consumed in the fire,
Give me new Phoenix wings to fly at my desire."
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Postby Saturn » Tue Apr 24, 2007 10:23 pm

I like to think of my poems as moderno-romantic hybrids so you are in good company here :wink:
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Postby dks » Wed Apr 25, 2007 12:41 am

AsphodelElysium wrote:Thank you! It is interesting that you brought that up. It was also brought up in the aforementioned workshop, though the language, according to my professor, was more "Romantic" than "Modern." I don't know if he meant that to be a compliment or not, my guess is not, but I was flattered anyway.


Indeed, that was a compliment!! As it should have been...a nice, marbled hybrid--yes, I see that.
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Wed Apr 25, 2007 6:34 pm

Saturn wrote:I like to think of my poems as moderno-romantic hybrids so you are in good company here :wink:


I'm glad to hear it. :D
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But, when I am consumed in the fire,
Give me new Phoenix wings to fly at my desire."
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Wed Apr 25, 2007 6:39 pm

Indeed, that was a compliment!! As it should have been...a nice, marbled hybrid--yes, I see that.


Coming from that particular prof., it probably wasn't, lol. I think he confuses Romanticism with sentimentality, and therefore makes it a dirty word by association. In any case, I'm glad you all like the poem. :D
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