Ventriloquist

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Ventriloquist

Postby Saturn » Wed May 16, 2007 10:58 pm

Ventriloquist

I write these words
For one that can't speak:
That wondrous organ
Beguiled of a tongue.
Of all the body's parts
This has the loudest,
The most articulate
Voice yet it is dumb.
If only it could speak
Through its pumps
And valves it could
Make such a speech,
Such grand oratory
That all the world
Would listen intent
To the heart's word.

If I could translate
And set all down
I would miracles
Of beauty reveal,
Fathom sweet love's
Unknown language.
Such laments, such
Delicate plaintive songs
Would shame poets
And every single bard
In civilisations and aeons
Of human understanding.

All I can do is interpret
Throw a generated voice
For this flesh and blood
Puppet-organ's speech;
I'm just the ventriloquist
Mimicking it's discourse.
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Fri May 18, 2007 3:09 pm

I had an extensive reply all typed out, was getting ready to post, and the database was gone. :(

So I'll try to give it another go.

What I like about this poem, what I like about all of your poetry, is the directness and clarity of it. Yet there is still a feeling of multi-layeredness (if that is a word). :lol:

For example:

I write these words
For one that can't speak:
That wondrous organ
Beguiled of a tongue.
Of all the body's parts
This has the loudest,
The most articulate
Voice yet it is dumb.
If only it could speak
Through its pumps
And valves it could
Make such a speech,
Such grand oratory
That all the world
Would listen intent
To the heart's word.


There is the tease at the beginning, where the reader isn't quite sure who or what you're speaking of. Then you grab us with those great last lines, the "heart's word." Its wonderful. There is an honesty to your poems, as well, that I find very refreshing. Great job, Stephen.

Thank you for sharing!
"Let me not wander in a barren dream,
But, when I am consumed in the fire,
Give me new Phoenix wings to fly at my desire."
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Postby Saturn » Fri May 18, 2007 3:11 pm

Thank you for your kind words I really appreciate them :P
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Fri May 18, 2007 3:19 pm

I'm just being honest. :wink:
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But, when I am consumed in the fire,
Give me new Phoenix wings to fly at my desire."
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Postby Saturn » Fri May 18, 2007 9:20 pm

What's with the feet by the way? :lol:
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Sat May 19, 2007 10:42 am

Ah, the feet. Well, I first have to give the disclaimer, I do not have a foot fetish. :lol: I'm really more interested in the hands. :wink: Its just hard to photograph your own hands, all things considered.

But to get to the point. It occurred to me a few years ago that the hands and feet are probably the most graceful and underappreciated parts of the body and they do the most work. I mean, think about it. Your feet carry you around everywhere and your hands do the rest. I took some pics of my feet out of appreciation and because it would be mildly creepy to take snapshots of someone else's. And my hands, well, see above. I'd snap a photo of them if I could.
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Postby Saturn » Sat May 19, 2007 10:45 am

My feet and hands are horrible they are best unseen :oops:
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Sat May 19, 2007 11:18 am

Saturn wrote:My feet and hands are horrible they are best unseen :oops:


I am glaring at you right now. I'm sure there is nothing wrong with your hands and feet. :!:

Particularly if you play guitar. You probably have those nice, long, tapered fingers and I'd be willing to lay money down that your feet are likewise shapely.

Leave the self-deprecation to people who deserve it, me for example. :wink:
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Postby Saturn » Sat May 19, 2007 2:58 pm

Believe me you do not want to see my hands and feet up close I am a dermatologists worst nightmare - and I wish I was joking about that :?

Also you really are a newbie here - any of the guys will tell you my own extremely biting self-deprecating humour is one of my main characteristics and a deadly weapons of self-defence :wink: :lol:

You can't win a battle of self-deprecation with me miss I'm a flagellate with words. If it's one thing I'm good at it's putting myself down :?

Enough of this randomness...
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Postby AsphodelElysium » Sun May 20, 2007 6:05 pm

Saturn wrote:Also you really are a newbie here


Well, I hope you won't hold that against me. :wink:
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