A Sonnet

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A Sonnet

Postby BrokenLyre » Fri Aug 30, 2013 5:18 am

From my daughter who loves Keats too:

A Sonnet

I sit upon my bed and think,
While Heaven frees her heavy tears
Thoughts that tumble, turn, and sink
But never fall quite linear.
For what I feel I cannot write,
Like a ship without a shore,
My mind strangles my pen at night;
And empty letters hit the floor.
What soft mangled words do come
Bear no merit to another
And I have written one more poem,
Let this sonnet, too, be smothered.
For all the dreams in my poised hand,
I know this ship will never land.


I couldn't get the lines laid out like she had them originally (with proper indents), The default mode left justified all lines. Oh well. It's her third poem and I wanted to share it with somebody.
"Come... dry your eyes, for you are life, rarer than a quark and unpredictable beyond the dreams of Heisenberg; the clay in which the forces that shape all things leave their fingerprints most clearly. Dry your eyes... and let's go home."
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Re: Fire & water

Postby Saturn » Fri Aug 30, 2013 1:29 pm

Hey BrokenLyre I have moved this to a separate new topic.

Your daughter is a very bright girl obviously with great taste.
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Re: A Sonnet

Postby marwood » Tue Oct 01, 2013 9:54 am

Very good! I wish that I appreciated Keats much earlier.
Maybe my teachers didn't have the passion to engaged the young, restless, day dreaming soul
that I was! Or lazy layabout as my teacher was prone to put it!
Either way I'll blame the teacher!
Thanks for sharing.
Take care.
That I might drink, and leave the world unseen.
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Re: A Sonnet

Postby steffen » Mon Dec 30, 2013 8:58 pm

A beautifully crafted piece of work which shows so much promise. It's amazing such sensitivity and such agility in one so young. Thank you for this,
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Re: A Sonnet

Postby Raphael » Thu Mar 13, 2014 5:01 am

She has done well on this Broken Lyre- great to see you have a poetic daughter. :D
John....you did not live to see-
who we are because of what you left,
what it is we are in what we make of you.

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