Pastoral Symphony Haikus

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Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby Raphael » Thu Mar 13, 2014 4:59 am

Pastoral Symphony Haiku

(First Movement: Erwachen heiterer Empfindungen bei der Ankunft auf dem Lande (Awakening of cheerful feelings upon arrival in the country)

Leaves blow in the breeze
the music of trees
carried in the wind
to the ears who can hear
the symphony of nature.


Beethoven's Brook, Pastoral Symphony Haiku

Szene am Bach (Scene at the brook)

Reflections in the water-
gold undulates into the blue;
windows into other eyes
seeing anew.
Hearing with the heart,
ink stained fingers
scratch across the page.


Pastoral Symphony Haiku-The Country Folk


Lustiges Zusammensein der Landleute (Happy gathering of country folk)

Piping rises in the air,
rough fingers tapping a rhythm
as earth stained feet
circle to nature's beat.
A scherzo of blurring colours
and laughter
seeping into the ink
of Beethoven's notebook.


Pastoral Symphony Haiku-Gewitter, Sturm (Thunderstorm; Storm)

Water falls
on the page
and taps the battered hat.
Voices rise
over the groans in the sky.
Seeking the arms
of the trees
sodden bodies huddle together
as one
shrugs into his coat
and raises his eyes to the Heavens.


Pastoral Symphony Haiku-End of the Storm.


Hirtengesang. Frohe und dankbare Gefühle nach dem Sturm (Shepherds' song; cheerful and thankful feelings after the storm)

Droplets shaken,
fall from the old hat
as sensitive fingers
send them
back home.
Sunlight warms
brown faces,
knotty hands clasped
in thanks and joy.
Muted voices,
in the ears
of a silent man
walking away,
his notebook carrying
the sounds he hears in his soul.

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Re: Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby Saturn » Thu Mar 13, 2014 9:14 am

Yeah I love Beethoven Raphael but you do know this part of the forum is for people to share poems they've written themselves exclusively.
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Re: Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby Raphael » Thu Mar 13, 2014 12:46 pm

Saturn wrote:Yeah I love Beethoven Raphael but you do know this part of the forum is for people to share poems they've written themselves exclusively.


I did write them Saturn... :D
(Matilda Woodhouse is my pen name)
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Re: Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby gstormcrow » Sat Jun 28, 2014 8:14 am

I think your haikus matched with Beethoven's 6th are wonderful, Raphael! :shock: :D

Listened to it while experiencing them and the many parallels to my life were almost too surreal except the country part of it which had me pining for the fjords in the big city. I'd like some more of these, please.

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Re: Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby Raphael » Sun Sep 07, 2014 6:54 pm

gstormcrow wrote:I think your haikus matched with Beethoven's 6th are wonderful, Raphael! :shock: :D

Listened to it while experiencing them and the many parallels to my life were almost too surreal except the country part of it which had me pining for the fjords in the big city. I'd like some more of these, please.

Thanks for this & Best Wishes.


Wow thanks gstromcrow! Do you know I never wrote poems before (except a couple of really rubbish ones ages ago). The first one I wrote was Soup:

Ludwig van Beethoven had a wretched cook;
who could make him a good soup?
He got in a mood and threw a book,
as the servant was such a fool,
to lie and act like a mule.

Ach! Asses! Beethoven complains;
bad cooking gives him pains.
Only those whose heart is pure, will not find,
their soup on the floor.


And posted it on a Beethoven forum, as I'd found some Beethoven poems on Hello Poetry. I was posting/sharing with a guy on the forum about our response to one of them, so he wrote one for fun and I wrote Soup, then the haikus just came to me like that! And I joined Hello Poetry and I got some good comments and the next day they were on the Trending Now page!

Here's my Wordpress:

http://edwardianpiano.wordpress.com/my-poetry/
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Re: Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby gstormcrow » Mon Sep 08, 2014 6:07 am

Didn't know that was your first poem. Definitely a good start, imho. At least your "rubbish ones" were ages ago - my new ones are still turning out to be somewhat rubbish. :?

Btw, I'll check out that Hello Poetry page you mentioned - sounds very intriguing. Thanks for the tip.

(Later edit) Just checked out 'Hello Poetry' & found you (under Matilda Woodhouse) and your 'Scrap of Paper' poem which I think is very good yet, imo, ended too soon & left me wanting more though maybe that's just the tinker in me missing the point of its brevity. Noticed you were also born in '68 which I think is a pretty cool coincidence.
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Re: Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby Raphael » Mon Sep 08, 2014 2:19 pm

Oh thanks re Scrap of Paper...yes I was thinking of looking at that again and adding more. Thanks for jolting me into working more on that. I thought there could be more also, but notthing more came at the time- usually my poems reveal themselves to me in one go.

I've also got fiction and essays on my Wordpress- some Keatsian stuff there. :D

You ought to join Hello Poetry too! :D And Saturn!
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Re: Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby gstormcrow » Thu Sep 11, 2014 7:16 pm

Raphael wrote:Yes, middle age is well and truly upon me.

I'm right there with you, my friend. :shock:

Unsure if I'm coming off too critical or nitpick-y and, if so, please let me know. Developed that bad, semi-uncontrollable habit in my teens from writing songs with band members and just can't seem to stop myself from trying to collaborate when it comes to music & poetry. Unfortunately, the problem is compounded in the way I type because my writing style often affords me little-to-no clear inflection without quite a bit of "framing". If "brevity is the soul of wit", I can't be very wise. I'm also still pretty green when it comes to posting on forums. Emoticons are often my heroes. :oops:

Please be assured that if I've decided to give my input on any piece (</= 2 cents) it means I am just trying to provide my possibly different perspective which, if ignored or thought to be a total miss, would not at all offend me. For good and bad, I am truly a tinker and sincerely appreciate any & all thoughtful criticisms. I guess it's kind of similar to doctors getting second opinions from their colleagues on patients: some welcome them and some don't like them at all because they can confuse everyone involved.

See what I mean about framing? That took me two paragraphs! :roll:

Here's the nutshell: please let me know if I'm being an ass.

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Re: Pastoral Symphony Haikus

Postby Raphael » Thu Sep 11, 2014 8:03 pm

You make fair and nice comments- it's all good. :D
Nice to see you on Hello Poetry!
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