Night or day?

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Night or day?

Postby Saturn » Tue Jun 30, 2015 9:06 am

Night or day

In my stumbledrunkeness, sodden,
Swollen loneness; ambling ahead
A relic in the distance swayed.
A man out of time asked the time.
His accent old, rural, fossil voiced.
Pipe-lipped he sucked, blew out words
With the polite reserve of ages past
"Night or day?" said he. I struggled
To grasp meaning with both ears.
Apology rendered, again he said
"Night or day?" "I have no idea"
I told him, half in joking, but
Half in despair, not knowing
If the glass was empty or full.
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Re: Night or day?

Postby marwood » Fri Aug 28, 2015 2:38 pm

I like this Saturn. Love the phrase 'fossil voiced'
Hope all is well with you.
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That I might drink, and leave the world unseen.
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Re: Night or day?

Postby Cybele » Fri Aug 28, 2015 4:05 pm

I second Marwood's remarks!
So many good poems have a lot of meaning and substance between the words, and this is one of those poems.
"The philosopher proves that the philosopher exists. The poet merely enjoys existence."
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Re: Night or day?

Postby Saturn » Mon Aug 31, 2015 8:13 pm

Thanks guys!
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Re: Night or day?

Postby BrokenLyre » Tue Sep 01, 2015 4:55 am

I enjoyed this Saturn - a really nice, creative poem from your hand. Your images are wonderful.
"Come... dry your eyes, for you are life, rarer than a quark and unpredictable beyond the dreams of Heisenberg; the clay in which the forces that shape all things leave their fingerprints most clearly. Dry your eyes... and let's go home."
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