Conversation with Morpheus

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Conversation with Morpheus

Postby AhDistinctly » Wed Aug 23, 2006 6:47 pm

I thought I’d share with you my 4:30am poem. I’ve been suffering through a bout of insomnia. Just can’t seem to shut my mind off. I’m not a poet, but when I get in one of these humors, I tend toward poetry rather than prose. I’m not familiar with a 4x13 syllable convention, but what the heck.

I’m running on 2 hours sleep and am going to start getting punchy soon, so I’m going to back away from the computer as soon as this thing posts.


Conversation with Morpheus


Awake? But why?

My mind is restless. I am weary of the struggle.

Yet you fight me?

You wish to overpower my bed, not to share it.

Do you fear me?

I shall not answer. I dare not. Yet I desire—

You desire… me?

Respite from the thoughts that consume my mind --consume me.

Yield all to me.

I will not. I must? You would have it no other way!

It is my way.

I have secrets. And memories. They are mine alone.

We will share them.

Will you taunt me with images of what cannot be?

Or what can be.

Come to me, then. My struggle ends. You win. I will sleep.
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Postby greymouse » Wed Aug 23, 2006 9:49 pm

Hey, cool poem AhDistinctly. 8) Thanks for sharing it.

Will you taunt me with images of what cannot be?

Or what can be.


This is my favorite part of the poem. It's a little diabolical actually. Morpheus twists your thinking around. Instead of worrying that you can't have what's in your dreams, you realize you'll get what you won't have in real life. Sneaky! :twisted:

I've never seen this type of form before. You make it up, or is there somewhere I can learn more about it? Overall, the form works well for what you're doing because Morpheus' words are fewer and therefore carry more self-assurance and authority, whereas your words sound more confused and shifty. Maybe you can eventually do more with it?
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Postby Saturn » Wed Aug 23, 2006 10:53 pm

Excellent poem AhDistinctly.



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