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Render This Sheen

Postby bard of passion » Fri Jan 19, 2007 10:13 pm

Speak in speech beyond reproach,
beyond learning's touch: the body's speech.

Passion can teach a man bereft of strength
what reason is left, to what length
this man alone passion can reach
in language beyond learning's touch.

Elucidate the telling, as the peach
slow purpling underleaf tells much
to turn the phrase beyond reach.

Be taught beyond touch, beyond reproach:
lecture in the body's speech.

What berefts a man of strength?

But to do to endure and do as such
where words weaken at hands' touch

beyond learning's length where passion can reach,
render this sheen: speak the body's speech.


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There: it's done. Now you know what a lifetime (or so it seems) of reading Keats has done to me. John Keats! O I rue the day I found that Laurel edition of your selected poetry! I have borne your burden, I have suffered because of you and now I suffer anew because of you: the gateway poet, the slippery slope, the bard of passion and of mirth!
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Postby bard of passion » Mon Jan 22, 2007 6:09 pm

Interesting?

A poem with at least (I will divulge the 'peach' reference to the composition of one of his Odes) 6 direct allusions to Keatsian Ideas (and tropes) and no one comments???
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Postby Saturn » Mon Jan 22, 2007 10:31 pm

No-one is obliged to comment on anything anyone writes.

Some threads die unnoticed and unloved.

That's how it works on forums.

For someone so evidently self-confident and full of himself you seem to be desperately seeking approval.
"Oh what a misery it is to have an intellect in splints".
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Postby bard of passion » Mon Jan 22, 2007 11:01 pm

Saturn wrote:No-one is obliged to comment on anything anyone writes.

Some threads die unnoticed and unloved.

That's how it works on forums.

For someone so evidently self-confident and full of himself you seem to be desperately seeking approval.


Gee, thanks, I wasn't aware that we were not obliged to comment on anything posted.

And thanks for the comment of support, or was it a judgment?

Being true to yourself evidently can lead to some arrogant assumptions about other people, doesn't it Stephen?

One question: would the AMOUNT of poems posted give you any indication on WHO it is that seems "to be desperately seeking approval?"

I don't care, pick a time frame, say one day.
"I can see!" cried the blind man, as he picked up the hammer and saw.
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Postby Saturn » Mon Jan 22, 2007 11:13 pm

Look I'm not in the mood okay.

Do not use my real name because I did not tell you it myself and we are not on equal terms as I do not know yours.

The number of poems posted by me is nothing other than a reflection of how long I have been here [nearly three years]

I have never denied that I post things looking for approval but also because things I have posted have received favour in the past and people have encouraged me to post more.

I'm not the one being antagonistic here. You are the one who wants to stir things up.

If you think this site doesn't live up to its 'potential' [whatever that may be] you know where the door is okay?
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